Jimmy, a seventh-grader who dreamed of being the richest kid in school, decided to start a candy-selling side hustle. Every day, he brought in a large selection of candy, selling it to classmates during lunch and even in the middle of class without the teachers noticing. Soon, students started calling him “Candy King Jimmy,” lining up by his locker every morning to get the best picks. Jimmy had a secret—he wasn’t buying the candy. Instead, he stole it from a grocery store two blocks away from the school. Jimmy thought he was too clever to get caught and convinced himself that the store employees didn’t care about a few missing candy bars.
Jimmy’s “business” boomed, and he started taking orders for specific treats, promising next-day delivery. He bragged to his friends about how easy it was to “get free candy” and made up wild stories about paying for it all with his allowance. One afternoon, as he tried to sell a bag of candy during math class, the principal appeared and called him into the hallway. Complaints from students and wrappers scattered in the schoolyard had caught the principal’s attention. Jimmy tried hiding his bag, but the principal grabbed it and demanded an explanation.
Part 2
When the truth came out, security cameras revealed Jimmy stealing candy almost every day for a month. The police arrested him for grand theft, even though the total value of the candy was only $100. Shocked and embarrassed, Jimmy was sent to juvenile hall, where he stayed for an entire month. Meanwhile, his classmates gossiped nonstop, creating exaggerated stories about his supposed “crime ring.”
After two days, the class moved on to the next big drama—a food fight in the cafeteria—and stopped talking about Jimmy. His teachers erased his name from the attendance list, and his best friends stopped visiting him in juvenile hall. By the end of the week, it felt like Jimmy had never existed.
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Jimmy, a seventh-grader who dreamed of becoming the richest kid in school, decided to start a candy-selling hustle. Every day, he brought in a wide selection of treats, selling them to his classmates during lunch and even sneaking them into the middle of class when the teachers weren’t looking. Soon, students were lining up by his locker each morning to get the best picks. They started calling him “Candy King Jimmy.”
But Jimmy had a secret—he wasn’t buying the candy. Instead, he was stealing it from a grocery store just two blocks away. He convinced himself that the store employees wouldn’t miss a few candy bars here and there, and that he was too clever to get caught. For weeks, he managed to evade suspicion, thinking no one would notice the thefts.
Then, one day, the truth came out. The store had installed security cameras, and they had been recording Jimmy’s daily visits. The footage showed him taking candy almost every day for a month. The store reported him to the police, and Jimmy was arrested for grand theft, even though the total value of the candy was only $100.
Shocked and embarrassed, Jimmy was sent to juvenile hall, where he spent an entire month. His classmates, meanwhile, were quick to gossip about the “Candy King” turned criminal. Stories about his supposed “crime ring” spread like wildfire, and soon, exaggerated rumors had everyone talking.
But after just two days, the class moved on to the next big drama—a food fight in the cafeteria—and Jimmy’s scandal was forgotten. Teachers erased his name from the attendance list, and his friends stopped visiting him in juvenile hall. By the end of the week, it felt like Jimmy had never existed at all.
Back at school, life went on without him. The demand for candy grew, and soon, another student started selling sweets. Jimmy’s “business” was taken over by someone else, and the new “Candy King” delivered treats with the same flair Jimmy had once had.
Jimmy returned home, trying to play off the situation as though it didn’t bother him. He bragged to anyone who would listen that he’d paid for the candy with his allowance, making up wild stories to cover up the truth. One afternoon, as he tried to sell a bag of candy during math class, the principal appeared in the doorway. Jimmy’s heart sank.
Complaints from students and candy wrappers scattered in the schoolyard had finally caught the principal’s attention. Jimmy tried to hide the bag of candy, but the principal grabbed it before he could. “What’s this?” the principal demanded, his voice cold.
Jimmy froze, caught once again in the act.
Jimmy, a seventh-grader who dreamed of being the richest kid in school, decided to start a candy-selling side hustle. Every day, he brought in a large selection of candy, selling it to classmates during lunch and even in the middle of class without the teachers noticing. Soon, students started calling him “Candy King Jimmy,” lining up by his locker every morning to get the best picks. Jimmy had a secret—he wasn’t buying the candy. Instead, he stole it from a grocery store two blocks away from the school. Jimmy thought he was too clever to get caught and convinced himself that the store employees didn’t care about a few missing candy bars.
Jimmy’s “business” boomed, and he started taking orders for specific treats, promising next-day delivery. He bragged to his friends about how easy it was to “get free candy” and made up wild stories about paying for it all with his allowance. One afternoon, as he tried to sell a bag of candy during math class, the principal appeared and called him into the hallway. Complaints from students and wrappers scattered in the schoolyard had caught the principal’s attention. Jimmy tried hiding his bag, but the principal grabbed it and demanded an explanation.
Part 2
When the truth came out, security cameras revealed Jimmy stealing candy almost every day for a month. The police arrested him for grand theft, even though the total value of the candy was only $100. Shocked and embarrassed, Jimmy was sent to juvenile hall, where he stayed for an entire month. Meanwhile, his classmates gossiped nonstop, creating exaggerated stories about his supposed “crime ring.”
After two days, the class moved on to the next big drama—a food fight in the cafeteria—and stopped talking about Jimmy. His teachers erased his name from the attendance list, and his best friends stopped visiting him in juvenile hall. By the end of the week, it felt like Jimmy had never existed.
Jimmy, a seventh-grader who dreamed of being the richest kid in school, decided to start a candy-selling side hustle. Every day, he brought in a large selection of candy, selling it to classmates during lunch and even in the middle of class without the teachers noticing. Soon, students started calling him “Candy King Jimmy,” lining up by his locker every morning to get the best picks. Jimmy had a secret—he wasn’t buying the candy. Instead, he stole it from a grocery store two blocks away from the school. Jimmy thought he was too clever to get caught and convinced himself that the store employees didn’t care about a few missing candy bars.
Jimmy’s “business” boomed, and he started taking orders for specific treats, promising next-day delivery. He bragged to his friends about how easy it was to “get free candy” and made up wild stories about paying for it all with his allowance. One afternoon, as he tried to sell a bag of candy during math class, the principal appeared and called him into the hallway. Complaints from students and candy wrappers scattered in the schoolyard had caught the principal’s attention. Jimmy tried hiding his bag, but the principal grabbed it and demanded an explanation.
Jimmy, a seventh-grader who dreamed of being the richest kid in school, decided to start a candy-selling side hustle. Every day, he brought in a large selection of candy, selling it to classmates during lunch and even in the middle of class without the teachers noticing. Soon, students started calling him “Candy King Jimmy,” lining up by his locker every morning to get the best picks. Jimmy had a secret—he wasn’t buying the candy. Instead, he stole it from a grocery store two blocks away from the school. Jimmy thought he was too clever to get caught and convinced himself that the store employees didn’t care about a few missing candy bars.
Jimmy’s “business” boomed, and he started taking orders for specific treats, promising next-day delivery. He bragged to his friends about how easy it was to “get free candy,” and made up wild stories about paying for it all with his allowance. One afternoon, as he tried to sell a bag of candy during math class, the principal appeared and called him into the hallway. Complaints from students and wrappers scattered in the schoolyard had caught the principal’s attention. Jimmy tried hiding his bag, but the principal grabbed it and demanded an explanation.
When the truth came out, security cameras revealed Jimmy stealing candy almost every day for a month. The police arrested him for grand theft, even though the total value of the candy was only $100. Shocked and embarrassed, Jimmy was sent to juvenile hall, where he stayed for an entire month. Meanwhile, his classmates gossiped nonstop, creating exaggerated stories about his supposed “Crime Ring.”
After two days, the class moved on to the next big drama—a food fight in the cafeteria—and stopped talking about Jimmy. His teachers erased his name from the attendance list, and his best friends stopped visiting him in juvenile hall. By the end of the week, it felt like Jimmy had never existed.
Jimmy, a seventh-grader who dreamed of being the richest kid in school, decided to start a candy-selling side hustle. Every day, he brought in a large selection of candy, selling it to classmates during lunch and even in the middle of class without the teachers noticing. Soon, students started calling him “Candy King Jimmy,” lining up by his locker every morning to get the best picks. Jimmy had a secret—he wasn’t buying the candy. Instead, he stole it from a grocery store two blocks away from the school. Jimmy thought he was too clever to get caught and convinced himself that the store employees didn’t care about a few missing candy bars.
Jimmy’s “business” boomed, and he started taking orders for specific treats, promising next-day delivery. He bragged to his friends about how easy it was to “get free candy” and made up wild stories about paying for it all with his allowance. One afternoon, as he tried to sell a bag of candy during math class, the principal showed up and called Jimmy into the hallway. There was complaints from students and wrappers scattered in the schoolyard had caught the principal’s attention. Jimmy tried hiding his bag, but the principal grabbed it and demanded an explanation.
When the truth came out, security cameras showed Jimmy stealing candy almost every day for a month. The police arrested him for grand theft, even though the total value of the candy was only $100. Shocked and embarrassed, Jimmy was sent to juvenile hall, where he stayed for an entire month. Meanwhile, his classmates gossiped nonstop, creating exaggerated stories about his supposed “crime ring.”
After two days, the class moved on to the next big drama—a food fight in the cafeteria—and stopped talking about Jimmy. His teachers erased his name from the attendance list, and his best friends stopped visiting him in juvenile hall. By the end of the week, it felt like Jimmy had never existed.
Jimmy, a seventh grader who dreamed of being the richest kid in school, decided to start a side business selling candy. Every day he brought a large selection of sweets and sold them to his classmates during lunch and even in the middle of class without the teachers noticing. Soon, students began calling him “Candy King Jimmy” and lined up in front of his locker every morning to pick the best ones. Jimmy had a secret: he didn’t buy the candy, but instead stole it from a grocery store two blocks from the school. Jimmy thought he was too smart to get caught and convinced himself that the store employees didn’t care that some chocolate bars were missing.
Jimmy’s “business” prospered and he began taking orders for specific treats, promising next-day delivery. He bragged to his friends about how easy it was to “get free candy” and made up wild stories about how he had paid for everything with his allowance. One afternoon, while he was trying to sell a bag of candy during math class, the principal appeared and called him into the hallway. Complaints from students and wrappers scattered around the school yard had caught the principal’s attention. Jimmy tried to hide his bag, but the director snatched it away and demanded an explanation.
PART 2
When the truth came out, security cameras revealed that Jimmy had been stealing candy almost every day for a month. Police arrested him for grand theft, even though the total value of the candy was only $100. Shocked and embarrassed, Jimmy was sent to a reformatory, where he remained for a whole month. Meanwhile, his classmates gossiped non-stop, creating exaggerated stories about his supposed “criminal network.”
After two days, the class moved on to the next big drama (a food fight in the cafeteria) and they stopped talking about Jimmy. His teachers removed his name from the attendance list and his best friends stopped visiting him in reform school. By the end of the week, it seemed as if Jimmy had never existed.
Jimmy, a seventh-grader who dreamed of being the richest kid in school, decided to start a candy-selling side hustle. Every day, he brought in a large selection of candy, selling it to classmates during lunch and even in the middle of class without the teachers noticing. Soon, students started calling him “Candy King Jimmy,” lining up by his locker every morning to get the best picks. Jimmy had a secret—he wasn’t buying the candy. Instead, he stole it from a grocery store two blocks away from the school. Jimmy thought he was too clever to get caught and convinced himself that the store employees didn’t care about a few missing candy bars.
Jimmy’s “business” boomed, and he started taking orders for specific treats, promising next-day delivery. He bragged to his friends about how easy it was to “get free candy” and made up wild stories about paying for it all with his allowance. One afternoon, as he tried to sell a bag of candy during math class, the principal appeared and called him into the hallway. Complaints from students and wrappers scattered in the schoolyard had caught the principal’s attention. Jimmy tried hiding his bag, but the principal grabbed it and demanded an explanation.
When the truth came out, security cameras revealed Jimmy stealing candy almost every day for a month. The police arrested him for grand theft, even though the total value of the candy was only $100. Shocked and embarrassed, Jimmy was sent to juvenile hall, where he stayed for an entire month. Meanwhile, his classmates gossiped nonstop, creating exaggerated stories about his supposed “crime ring.”
After two days, the class moved on to the next big drama—a food fight in the cafeteria—and stopped talking about Jimmy. His teachers erased his name from the attendance list, and his best friends stopped visiting him in juvenile hall. By the end of the week, it felt like Jimmy had never existed.
Jimmy, a seventh-grader who dreamed of being the richest kid in school, decided to start a candy-selling side hustle. Every day, he brought in a large selection of candy, selling it to his classmates during lunch and even in the middle of class without the teachers noticing. Soon, students started calling him “Candy King Jimmy,” lining up by his locker every morning to get the best picks. Jimmy had a secret—he wasn’t buying the candy. Instead, he stole it from a grocery store two blocks away from the school. Jimmy thought he was too clever to get caught and convinced himself that the store employees didn’t care about a few missing candy bars.
Jimmy’s “business” boomed, and he started taking orders for specific treats, promising next-day delivery. He had bragged to his friends about how easy it was to “get free candy” and made up wild stories about paying for it all with his allowance. One afternoon, as he tried to sell a bag of candy during math class, the principal appeared and called him into the hallway. Complaints from students and wrappers scattered in the schoolyard had caught the principal’s attention. Jimmy tried hiding his bag, but the principal grabbed it and demanded an explanation.
Part 2
When the truth came out, security cameras revealed Jimmy stealing candy almost every day for a month. The police arrested him for grand theft, even though the total value of the candy was only $100. Shocked and embarrassed, Jimmy was sent to juvenile hall, where he stayed for an entire month. Meanwhile, his classmates gossiped nonstop, creating exaggerated stories about his supposed “crime ring.”
After two days, the class moved on to the next big drama—a food fight in the cafeteria—and stopped talking about Jimmy. His teachers erased his name from the attendance list, and his best friends stopped visiting him in juvenile hall. By the end of the week, it felt like Jimmy had never existed.
Jimmy, a seventh-grader who dreamed of being the richest kid in school, decided to start a candy-selling side hustle. Every day, he brought in a large selection of candy, selling it to classmates during lunch and even in the middle of class without the teachers noticing. Soon, students started calling him “Candy King Jimmy,” lining up by his locker every morning to get the best picks. Jimmy had a secret—he wasn’t buying the candy. Instead, he stole it from a grocery store two blocks away from the school. Jimmy thought he was too clever to get caught and convinced himself that the store employees didn’t care about a few missing candy bars.
Jimmy’s “business” boomed, and he started taking orders for specific treats, promising next-day delivery. He bragged to his friends about how easy it was to “get free candy” and made up wild stories about paying for it all with his allowance. One afternoon, as he tried to sell a bag of candy during math class, the principal appeared and called him into the hallway. Complaints from students and wrappers scattered in the schoolyard had caught the principal’s attention. Jimmy tried hiding his bag, but the principal grabbed it and demanded an explanation.
When the truth came out, security cameras revealed Jimmy stealing candy almost every day for a month. The police arrested him for grand theft, even though the total value of the candy was only $100. Shocked and embarrassed, Jimmy was sent to juvenile hall, where he stayed for an entire month. Meanwhile, his classmates gossiped nonstop, creating exaggerated stories about his supposed “crime ring.”
After two days, the class moved on to the next big drama—a food fight in the cafeteria—and stopped talking about Jimmy. His teachers erased his name from the attendance list, and his best friends stopped visiting him in juvenile hall. By the end of the week, it felt like Jimmy had never existed.
Jimmy, un estudiante de séptimo grado que soñaba con ser el niño más rico de la escuela, decidió empezar un negocio secundario vendiendo dulces. Todos los días traía una gran selección de dulces y los vendía a sus compañeros durante el almuerzo e incluso en medio de la clase sin que los maestros se dieran cuenta. Pronto, los estudiantes comenzaron a llamarlo “el rey de los dulces Jimmy” y hacían fila frente a su casillero todas las mañanas para elegir los mejores. Jimmy tenía un secreto: no compraba los dulces, sino que los robaba de una tienda de comestibles a dos cuadras de la escuela. Jimmy pensó que era demasiado listo para que lo atraparan y se convenció de que a los empleados de la tienda no les importaba que faltaran algunas barras de chocolate.
El “negocio” de Jimmy prosperó y empezó a recibir pedidos de golosinas específicas, prometiendo entregas al día siguiente. Se jactó ante sus amigos de lo fácil que era “conseguir dulces gratis” e inventó historias disparatadas sobre cómo había pagado todo con su mesada. Una tarde, mientras intentaba vender una bolsa de dulces durante la clase de matemáticas, apareció el director y lo llamó al pasillo. Las quejas de los estudiantes y los envoltorios esparcidos por el patio de la escuela habían llamado la atención del director. Jimmy intentó esconder su bolsa, pero el director se la arrebató y le exigió una explicación.
Parte 2
Cuando se supo la verdad, las cámaras de seguridad revelaron que Jimmy había estado robando caramelos casi todos los días durante un mes. La policía lo arrestó por hurto mayor, aunque el valor total de los caramelos era de tan solo 100 dólares. Impresionado y avergonzado, Jimmy fue enviado a un reformatorio, donde permaneció un mes entero. Mientras tanto, sus compañeros de clase chismorreaban sin parar, creando historias exageradas sobre su supuesta “red criminal”.
Después de dos días, la clase pasó al siguiente gran drama (una pelea de comida en la cafetería) y dejaron de hablar de Jimmy. Sus profesores borraron su nombre de la lista de asistencia y sus mejores amigos dejaron de visitarlo en el reformatorio. Al final de la semana, parecía como si Jimmy nunca hubiera existido.