Jimmy, a seventh-grader who dreamed of being the richest kid in school, decided to start a candy-selling side hustle. Every day, he brought in a large selection of candy, selling it to classmates during lunch and even in the middle of class without the teachers noticing. Soon, students started calling him “Candy King Jimmy,” lining up by his locker every morning to get the best picks. Jimmy had a secret—he wasn’t buying the candy. Instead, he stole it from a grocery store two blocks away from the school. Jimmy thought he was too clever to get caught and convinced himself that the store employees didn’t care about a few missing candy bars.
Jimmy’s “business” boomed, and he started taking orders for specific treats, promising next-day delivery. He bragged to his friends about how easy it was to “get free candy” and made up wild stories about paying for it all with his allowance. One afternoon, as he tried to sell a bag of candy during math class, the principal appeared and called him into the hallway. Complaints from students and wrappers scattered in the schoolyard had caught the principal’s attention. Jimmy tried hiding his bag, but the principal grabbed it and demanded an explanation.
Part 2
When the truth came out, security cameras revealed Jimmy stealing candy almost every day for a month. The police arrested him for grand theft, even though the total value of the candy was only $100. Shocked and embarrassed, Jimmy was sent to juvenile hall, where he stayed for an entire month. Meanwhile, his classmates gossiped nonstop, creating exaggerated stories about his supposed “crime ring.”
After two days, the class moved on to the next big drama—a food fight in the cafeteria—and stopped talking about Jimmy. His teachers erased his name from the attendance list, and his best friends stopped visiting him in juvenile hall. By the end of the week, it felt like Jimmy had never existed.
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